@King_Foxtrot first of all sorry I missed your first (maybe more ?) short story. I will try to give my critique to that short story another time. For now I will just focus on All Alone
Sorry in advanced, sometimes my critique can seem a little harsh, I only write these in order to help you become a better writer.
The first thing I noticed was the first sentence was not so strong (not to mention it is a run on, but since grammer in fiction writing isn’t super important you can ignore that part.) The sentence starts off good with “It happened so fast,” since that is a suspenseful beginning with some very harsh words. However then the sentence uses a soft double negative “but I only needed” which really feels indecisive. On top of that “but” and “only” are words you should avoid in a first sentence because they imply indecision or (depending on usage) they imply description. The sentence continues and says “to see the destruction of the town” again this is fine because it is harsh and leaves the door open for the rest of your story. But then this next part just feels weak to my writers intuition. “For myself to feel the force of our failure.” It’s hard for me to explain but the main thing that is turning me off here is the word “myself” here, “me” sounds much better in context. But it may also be the the four words beginning with the same sound so close together.
The first sentence is the only one I will be ultra-nitpicky with, since indeed it is in the first sentence that a reader makes his decision whether he will read this or leave it.
From there the story begins to look up (from a composition stand point, the plot itself is starting to darken which is good) probably the most apparent “method” that really makes this story come together is the boom-booms. They are all around good, they imply a passage of time, they emphasis the climax, they build suspense, and most importantly they cover up for the fact that the story itself has no action. In my opinion a story that can use emotion and good writing as its appeal is a much stronger story (my favorite composition I have shared on the discourse to date is called A Fight to the Death its in one of the writer’s workshops. Not a variable changes in the story except for a decision in the old man’s brain. There is no violent action, no explosions, there isn’t even any movement, just thoughts. But I am going on a tangent here…)
One small thing that I noticed which could be good or bad depending on opinion is that the character notices some pretty irrelevant stuff and describes it (i.e when he accidentally bruises a few turnips or when he holds back the fowl bile in his mouth.) the reason I could see this being a negative thing is because it is a little tangential and a person wouldn’t really remember that kind of stuff in such a high stake situation. On the other hand people do in fact go into hyper focus mode during an Adrenalin spiked situation. I tend to lean toward the latter way of thinking since indeed the story is told in the present. Perhaps you would run into a problem had you written the story in past tense.
Another few good literary tricks I noticed where things like not naming the ents until the climax. This builds suspense and portrays fear. Or having the squared thoughts written between the booms. You also use ellipses very well.
All in all a great short story and I look forward to reading more of your works. I hope what I wrote helps you.