I appreciate the concern greatly, but I did check with @SteveAdamo first, so we’re good .
And I think I understand what you’re saying about the ending. How it didn’t quite flow as smooth as the rest. I liked what I did with it, but the wording just never worked out the way I wanted. I still like it well enough though. You said it just kind of trailed off, were you looking for a more conclusive or maybe more definitive end? Do you think that would’ve better suited this story?
Oh, and it wasn’t supposed to be so much the city itself, but the adventure of embarking on a journey and building something great that he dreamt about. But I can see how, again, that wording just didn’t play out with the desired tone…but I still like it
Thanks for the feedback! It can’t get better if there’s nothing wrong with it, now can it? And it can always get better